It's hard

by I Heart Question Mark   Feb 7, 2008


It's hard to see you smile at her the way i want you to smile at me
It's hard to see you laugh with her the way i want you to laugh with me
It's hard to see you hang out with her the way i want you to hang out with me
It's hard to see you hug her the way i want you to hug me
It's hard to see you touch her the way i want you to touch me

It's hard to know you tell her things you don't tell me
It's hard to know shes with you when thats where i want to be

It's hard to know she loves you the way i do
It's hard to see her look at you the way i do
It's hard to see her smile at you the way i do

All i'm saying is it's hard to see the relationship you have with her knowing that i want our relationship to be like that

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  • 16 years ago

    by Hidden1

    Girl I know that's right!!!! I can feel every sentence in this poem!!! Been there and done that, I wish there was a way that we could get what we wanted and have them feel the same way we do. Can't help but feel a tab bit jealous when we see the one's we want with another chick. This is really good!!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by Alyssia L K

    I really like this poem. Along with I wanna be, thats really good too!

  • 16 years ago

    by Letty

    This poem has a strong touch of sadness to it and I agree with Erin, to it being realistic; but there are to many repetitions and it makes it hard to focus on the message you're trying to convey. The flow is also a bit shaky and you need to add punctuation. Punctuation is a plus where this poem is concerned. I admit that with some poems you don't need it, but this particular poem is screaming for it. You also need to capitalize any single I. I believe that you should consider this to being like your first draft, edit it, add a little more depth and it would be perfect. I liked it; don't get me wrong. It just needs a little work. I look forward to reading it when you're done editing. : )

    Letty

  • 16 years ago

    by erin girl

    It's always hard to see someone with another person other then yourself! I know how that feels, i think alot of us do. This poem is very realistic and i think alot of people can relate. Try to get more deep with your thoughts instead of the norm. Look at the little things.
    Good job!

    *E