Its a bit hard to find the ryth and flow in this poem. it somehow seems like some of the words are misplaced and you need to use signs to make it readable and easy on the eyes...
i like the message though. thats why i give you a 3 - go through the poem and check gramma (add signs) and then submit it again! :-)

I agree with your first comment. The MAIN idea is great, but watch your flow and your transitions. It starts to make more sense once it has rhythm.

I don't follow the title in the poem itself. The poem's flow is confusing, and I notice the first line is the only one in this poem that's starts off with a capitalized word.

The message I get from reading this is "Life is SCARY." But even that message that "I" see is not clear enough.

I agree with the other comments. This poem needs some work also. I really didn't get your meaning of the poem; and it was hard to follow because of the structure of it. As I suggested before, go over it and edit, and then resubmit it. Good luck!

Letty