Too late

A sad piece, but very relatable. The flow was excellent and the rhyming was fantastic. Great poem!

This is really sad. But it flowed so well, and your wording and rhyme scheme was excellent. This write was very powerful and it ended so well. Keep writing. 5/5

GREAT write! Much improved from your other works. I really enjoyed this poem and it deserves a 5/5! The flow was good, I absolutely loved the word choice, and the concept was good. Wonderful poem!

I hope you don't mind my critiquing cuz im gunna be brutal, but honest, and all to help you. i put my input in brackets.

to[o] late
I don't understand the hate.
What[']s the reason for my fate?
I need to relax and be who [I] am.
But it seems no one even gives a damn.
Wishing someone would love me,
So my soul can feel free.
Broken hearts and hurtful tears,
That[']s my suffering through the years.[I like this line and the one before it. they are good.]
It[']s nothing easy to take care of,
Especially the child [I] had from above.
[i think you need to create stanzas then its not to crowded, gives it a crisper look and just makes me feel better as a reader.]
Being a single mom[no s] kills me slowly,
Although I can[']t find anyone to want me.
Love is nowhere in sight,
This life is getting harder to fight.
No more tears or screams of pain,
Just take the razor across my vein.
No longer do [I] want to be here,
My life is to damn sever[e?].
Take me away from all the hurt.
Cut me so my blood will squirt.
[little brutal. plus you got that girl u need take care of. don't do anything drastic. your girl is gunna need u]
Watch me fall as [I] slowly die,
Don't let me see a tear from your eye.
You didn't care before so don't act now,
Don't even ask the question "how"
I asked for help many times before,
But to[o] late now cause I'm dead on the floor.

wow. that was a powerful ending...

I hope I helped. I'm not familiar with your style, so most of the edits are probably pointless...

Keep going at it, dear. Keep moving forward.

-Kitty