Woah dude this poem was weird. it was alright but it needed better flow to it.

WOW this is really really good, i loved it!

Lovely job I really loved it the descriptions were amazing and the flow was pretty good the vocabulary you chose was fantastic nice work the 8th line was my favorite i think it spoke to me
5/5

Wow. amazing. i love how the begining is o so whimsical and the end is just so horrid. beautiful. really. i also loved the repition. this is honestly my favorite poem i have read on this site.

This was an amazing write. the description was amazing and the imagery was great. the flow was good and this was a very nicely written piece. this poem got my attention from start to finish. :] i dunno what else to say or how else to explain how -amazing- this piece is. lol. 5/5.

Awwww

soooo sweet and sad at the same time

That was great. Im into the story. Hurry with the next part! 5/5.

That was great. Im into the story. Hurry with the next part! 5/5.

This poem was really good. A lil long, but good :)

Good. Good
Keep Iit Up!
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That is one of the deepest most beautifully heartbreaking and emotional pieces I've read in a long time. In fact it carries the essence of older poets the ones that are often now forgotten. It was amazing. I love your line about 'love is for the birds and you have no wings' and then made reference to how he wasn't even a penguin. The depth of this peace is amazing and incomparable. Great job!
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