Fading Sounds (lyrical)

by HidinVictim   Feb 8, 2008


My feet will hit the, ground
One day may i be found
My heart buried under that mound
Pound-pound-pound
That haunting, sound
He's using the hounds
Trying, trying
To find my heart sound
Under these fears,
My tears, all i hear, is cheers
As i hit the, ground
Pound-pound-pound
My fading... sound

** try reading this with a beat, at every comma pause for 2 second, the ponds with dashs are like quick heart beats, and the ...'s pause for 3 seconds** HOPE YOU ENJOY

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  • 16 years ago

    by A l y s s a

    I do like it but I'm not sure that the rhyming really does it justice. I think it sounded a bit 'forced' (if that makes sense) & thats the beautiful thing about poetry it doesn't have to always rhyme. The flow was also a bit rocky, but maybe I wasn't reading it right? Anyways, keep it up :0

    Ally. x

  • 16 years ago

    by Rob Matt

    U like the style. Some of it doesnt flow, even when u read it right. Some of the word placements just dont go right with the others.

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