U like the style. Some of it doesnt flow, even when u read it right. Some of the word placements just dont go right with the others.

I do like it but I'm not sure that the rhyming really does it justice. I think it sounded a bit 'forced' (if that makes sense) & thats the beautiful thing about poetry it doesn't have to always rhyme. The flow was also a bit rocky, but maybe I wasn't reading it right? Anyways, keep it up :0

Ally. x