This haiku was amazing. i thought they were supposed to be about nature, but i think heaven could count. nice chooince of words. they helped the poem along. and yes you did do the haiku right. 5/5 !props!

Note: Haiku is an unrhymed Japanese verse consisting of three unrhymed lines of five, seven, and five syllables (5, 7, 5) or 17 syllables in all. Haiku is usually written in the present tense and focuses on nature. This should be SENRYU- formed poem with the same syllable count as haiku but it can be about any topic.
Other than that^^ this is truly amazing write, so intense. You managed to say so much within such short formed piece which is impressive. The feeling of darkness in this poem is overwhelming and whole piece is truly vivid.
Overall, you did excellent job.
5/5 from me

Should be under quotes. even though it's not really a quote.

Nicely descriptive.
The words were strong, and portrayed I believe the darkness you were trying to get across.
Amazing Senryu.
5/5 --Elly.

Very powerful and full of meaning. Your choice words reflected your message effectively. The flow was flawless and everything just fit into place. Beautifully done .. *5/5*

I've leaned something today! I was always confused about the differnce between a Haiku and a Senryu. But I always seem to have trouble writing either. You've done a great job here though, I think the title is really important in conveying the overall meaning of the poem. Great one! 5/5

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5 i liked it short but great

WOW! that says so much in so little words! LOVED IT!

Yeah I didn't understand this way of writing, but it does tell me i have alot to learn about poetry. 5/5

Im not familiar with this style of poetry but i think even though it was short and i dont know anything about it..it was kinda right to the point lol...so 5/5 from me.

Beautiful, unique, and wow powerful. heaven fading.. deep..