Very sweet poem!

I love this poem. It Tells a story and is very realistic. It has a theme or love, trust, hopes and dreams. It all fits together so nicely. I like how towards the end you said it was a dream because it makes it more real. Alot of people go through that. Very good job!
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Very cute poem i liked it a lot its soo cute

That was sooo sweet!! ^-^ good job on this poem!!

This was really beautiful. I like the way you made it seem as if you were telling the reader your dream, but in the end it seems as if you're talking to the girl that was in your dreams. The flow of this poem is great and so is the imagery. There are only a few minor problems. The first one is at the beginning of the 6th line; you should remove the word "and"; it is not needed. Instead it should just be “what she's going through". That way the flow is even tighter. The second one is on line 27, you have a spelling error. You have 'ma" instead of the correct word "my". You also need to add correct punctuation and capitalize the I in the beginning of line 11. Overall this was still some fantastic writing. : ) Keep up the great work!

Letty

I really love this poem. It was almost as if I were there watching this scene play out in a movie. It kind of puts me in the mind of the movie, Notebook how he is telling the story to his wife. I love this and it is so heartfelt. Really sweet and I like it a whole lot.

This was such a beautiful poem...it was sweet,gentle, innocent..filled with beauty and emotions..great job..keep it up!! :D