Tained Love

by SH3S fiNAllY H3R3 l0V3 U N3NA   Feb 9, 2008


I have feelings of love,
For the guy I see everyday.
Does he love me too,
What does he think of me?

I wish I could tell him,
He makes me whole,
But I'm afraid to say,
What's deep in my soul.

I don't want to lose him,
For I would be alone,
And some days I just can't wait,
To hear his voice on the phone.

He does certain things
To make me feel loved,
Some days he wants to be alone,
And my heart is shoved.

I want to feel as though,
I am his safeguard,
The one he can come to,
When things get hard.

I will always be there,
To help him along,
And before we met,
I wasn't as strong.

I wish I could tell him
What I feel inside,
But I'm afraid of what he'll say,
Because simply,
I can't live without him.

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  • 17 years ago

    by XxXcrystalXcontagiousXxX

    I liked it 5/5 it was good i conected with this poem if its real u should tottaly tell him and i also really liked the flow in this one not many people have this kinda good talent keep on
    wrighting

  • 17 years ago

    by XxToWriteLoveOnHerWristxX

    The rythem of this poem wasn't as good as it could be but it worked out in the end. and the lines in this poem kind of reminded me of "butterflies" in your stomach when your afraid of stuff which you said in your poem. i feel the same way with it. 5/5 !props!

  • 17 years ago

    by Lizaveta

    I like it
    it flows well, and i like the rhythm
    feelng are described really exactly:))

    but there is one thing i'd recommend u
    try to make a poem not that straight
    i mean, u write:

    <i have feelings of love>
    <i don't whant to lose him>

    try some poetics words, compare what you feel with something - it all will make poem more beautiful and kinda elusive.

    but all in all, good work:)

  • 17 years ago

    by Shinobi

    This poem shows a raw epress of emotions in a simple language. The choosing of words are a little weak in this poem. The flow was good, the rhymes were missing in the first stanza. The ending is a bit weak as well. I sa better pieces you've written and I must say that they were a lot better. Better luck on next piece 4/5

  • 17 years ago

    by The Queen

    HOw LOveLy...beAutifuLLy wRiTten..sOo SwEet aNd shOweD uR siNceReSt fEeliNg towArds dA gUy pIctUreD iN dA pOem..lOve iS suCh a pOweRfuL emOtioN dAt Once iT enVelOpes tHe bOth oF yOU iT dOesNt dEpArt...Nice wOrk..

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