I liked reading your poem, it's very sweet and sincere.

A way in which you can improve in a future could be to use more poetic words, and describe more the things you only mention.

I hope this helped. =)

Thanks for sharing.

I totally get this poem. I've been in such a predicament before. And I have felt like his, as you say, safeguard before. .well i was. [until he moved on] and i was no longer a necessity of his life. But this poem was really heartfelt, but sad at the same time. the flow was great and the pattern was nice. very well thought out and you let off the emotion excellently. :] 5/5.

Wow i love this poem
and i can totally relate to it
and it had great emotion in it which made me relate to it even more!!!
5/5

<3 i love you silly

Wow!! thats soo good! i love it so much! really cute, i feel the same way, it's almost like you just described me! lol! =] excelent job! Keep it up!

I found this poem very intriguing to read. Although I personally couldn't relate to it, obviously people could ^^^ which is excellent. A good writer can convey a chosen emotion and that is what you have done.

The stanza that threw me a little:

"He does certain things
To make me feel loved,
Some days he wants to be alone,
And my heart is shoved."

I think it was just the "My heart is shoved" as it didn't sound quite right to me and distracted me a little. But the rest of the poem flowed nicely.

Another thing I would suggest would be the use of more 'sophisticated' or 'poetic' wording as this would give the poem a more 'graceful or 'polished' feel.

Anyway, just my thoughts...Great poem, I really enjoyed reading it!

Ally. x

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This poem shows a raw epress of emotions in a simple language. The choosing of words are a little weak in this poem. The flow was good, the rhymes were missing in the first stanza. The ending is a bit weak as well. I sa better pieces you've written and I must say that they were a lot better. Better luck on next piece 4/5

I like it
it flows well, and i like the rhythm
feelng are described really exactly:))

but there is one thing i'd recommend u
try to make a poem not that straight
i mean, u write:

<i have feelings of love>
<i don't whant to lose him>

try some poetics words, compare what you feel with something - it all will make poem more beautiful and kinda elusive.

but all in all, good work:)

The rythem of this poem wasn't as good as it could be but it worked out in the end. and the lines in this poem kind of reminded me of "butterflies" in your stomach when your afraid of stuff which you said in your poem. i feel the same way with it. 5/5 !props!

I liked it 5/5 it was good i conected with this poem if its real u should tottaly tell him and i also really liked the flow in this one not many people have this kinda good talent keep on
wrighting