Twilight

The whole this was too short you set the mood real strong and it made the reader want to read on but I think you had a lack of story or plot to really drive this poem further. It almost was like seeing a meal that looked so good then with one bite taste have no favor to the whole meal. Plot121 In short I would broaden the plot line and make you see everything that is happening. Tell a story with action emotion breath life into this and you will see some of your best work. Plot121

Wow..i love this poem. i love the creativity and how the words can paint a picture so vivd. :) great job! i love it

This poem is really good. I liked the concept of twilight and hell, it was nicely combinated. The stanzas were short and the rhymes were fit to the right place in this structure. I think this poem is well written, keep it up 5/5

A nice little poem, I think it could have been longer, a bit more descriptive and creative. But it was a good short poem. Good job.

This poem is really, very well written. :]
very well thought out. and i like the darkness
of this piece and the emotions were intense.
another great read/write. 5/5.