Great write loved the imagery, tiny error on line 4 inito - into* other then that loved the word choice and flow, keep it up

Wow thats soo good! it sent chills down my spine!! i love your use of words! Great job keep it up!

Wow thats soo good! it sent chills down my spine!! i love your use of words! Great job keep it up!

Quite short and the idea is pretty simple but is doesn't make the poem less beautiful. kind of piece of imagination. nice))) (i'd better say dreadful, lol)

Haha, this poem is the exact oppostie of what I feel about twilight. It'd definitely my favorite time of day. Anyways, I loved your wording. It was short, but good. Great write!

Cayce xx

Haha, this poem is the exact oppostie of what I feel about twilight. It'd definitely my favorite time of day. Anyways, I loved your wording. It was short, but good. Great write!

Cayce xx

This poem is really, very well written. :]
very well thought out. and i like the darkness
of this piece and the emotions were intense.
another great read/write. 5/5.

A nice little poem, I think it could have been longer, a bit more descriptive and creative. But it was a good short poem. Good job.

This poem is really good. I liked the concept of twilight and hell, it was nicely combinated. The stanzas were short and the rhymes were fit to the right place in this structure. I think this poem is well written, keep it up 5/5

Wow..i love this poem. i love the creativity and how the words can paint a picture so vivd. :) great job! i love it

The whole this was too short you set the mood real strong and it made the reader want to read on but I think you had a lack of story or plot to really drive this poem further. It almost was like seeing a meal that looked so good then with one bite taste have no favor to the whole meal. Plot121 In short I would broaden the plot line and make you see everything that is happening. Tell a story with action emotion breath life into this and you will see some of your best work. Plot121