Comments : Give Me Tonight

  • 16 years ago

    by Eman D

    The first stanza was good and it just got better along the way. 5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by Eman D

    The first stanza was good and it just got better along the way. 5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by Lemma

    Wow this poem gave me shivers! So beautiful and great repetition and rhyme. The first two stanzas are my favourite but I love it all! 5/5

    Em xXx

  • 16 years ago

    by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden

    I'm hearing this band member sing it and I'm trying REALLLLLY hard to try to remember the song and band I'm thinking of, it's driving me crazy! >_< Well I'll give it a four. I'll search until I find it! ^_^

  • 16 years ago

    by Jennifer RIP Lesthat Hayden

    I remember it! I had a different singer but it still had the same gist. Blue October-Hate Me. Whenever I read Give me tonight/give me... I heard it the way he sang Hate me todayyyyyyy.....etc.

  • 16 years ago

    by Cotton Candy Clouds

    Give me strength,
    So that I can fight,
    For what is right,
    In this complex life.

    ^^i absolutely loved that stanza! : ) you worded this poem perfectly 5/5 without a second thought : )

  • 16 years ago

    by Teria

    Once again, you've done an amazing job. it's not one of my favorites by you, but I'm sure that's because it's a love poem, eh. I rarely find a love poem that just blows me away, you know? BUt, this one was awfully close.

    You have great rhyme, word choice, flow, and everything a poem needs. Maybe a bit of emotion is gone? I'm not quite sure but there was something missing. . .

    "find" and "sign" do not rhyme, BUT they did sound good together and fit perfectly with this poem. (:

    Keep it up.

  • 16 years ago

    by Krathia

    I usually avoid love poems, but I couldn't resist the title. Right off, a great choice.

    "Give me tonight,
    To show you the stars"
    Absolutely lovely, amazing flow. Romantic and full of devotion.

    Every following stanza is a new turn in the path you've created, the continuous "Give me"s were very nice and you've structured this poem beautifully.

    The last stanza totally blew me away. I should have saw it coming with "above", since it all rhymes quite nicely, but I was just so caught up in it all that, upon reaching the last line, I could have died.

    Amazing work! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by BREEawNUHH

    Aw. This is very sweet. I love how you used "Give me.." as the first line in each stanza, but made the third word different. I thought this piece was beautiful. It was completely heartfelt, and I was smiling the whole time I was reading it.

    Great job. 5/5

    -Briana
    [& thanks for your comment!]

  • 16 years ago

    by iTdOnTmAtTeR

    Aww that was rly sweet. i liked it alot. grt job

  • 16 years ago

    by iTdOnTmAtTeR

    Aww that was rly sweet. i liked it alot. grt job