Very well written, your use of vocabulary was great my favorite part was:

The roses she had once admired
The beauty of its crimson red
Has been stained by a pitch black color
From the thoughts that linger through her head

Flow was excellent, over all very good poem. Short but no too short. Keep up the good work.

I don't know what to say, this piece was fabulous. Truly.
The pain was expressed clearly through your words, and snatched at our own emotions.

My favourite stanza had to be...

'Burdened with deceitfulness
Her jaded oppression remains concealed
Not of word of it she speaks
For fear of what she may reveal'

^ So often are we afraid to speak, for fear of what we might reveal. Relatable to many.

Flawless,
5/5 -Elaine.

That last two stanzas were awsome :)
fav lines
Burdened with deceitfulness
Her jaded oppression remains concealed
Not of word of it she speaks
For fear of what she may reveal

5.5

Wow wat a great poem
it had great emotion
but it was sad but i liked it
5/5

<3 i love you silly

That was beautifully written and i really enjoyed reading every words on it ... I liked your creativity. i loved the way how you described your emotion behind those words..excellent poem...keep it up....5/5

I'm impressed. Although the poem itself was short the message within it was strong therefor making the length perfect! Along with others ^^ this was my fav stanza

"Burdened with deceitfulness
Her jaded oppression remains concealed
Not of word of it she speaks
For fear of what she may reveal"

Your choice of words was impecable and your poem had a nice flow to it. The emotion was strong and related to your readers ^^^ which is the key to a great poem.

Exellent writing, loved reading it. Keep it up!

Ally. x

It had great flow and rythem and i loved this part, "burdened with deceitfulness Her jaded oppression remains concealed Not of word of it she speaks For fear of what she may reveal" i love the mysteriousness in this part. there was a lot of emotion throughout the entire piece. 5/5 !props!

Wow [; 5/5 i loved it great emotion

Omg! your an excelent writer! this is truely amazing! im adding this to one of my favorite poems! great job, i loved the 2nd stanza! the whole thing was awesome though! GREAT JOB!!!

Amazing job, m'dear. And I truly mean that. It was unique and creative. The title was perfectly chosen - it made the poem stick out to me a lot more. :) The flow was flawless, and the emotions really hit the reader's heart.

"Burdened with deceitfulness
Her jaded oppression remains concealed
Not of word of it she speaks
For fear of what she may reveal"

^ Love love love that stanza.
Beautiful job, m'dear.
Keep writing. (: Overall:5.5

- Steph.

Wow, this poem was absolutely amazing. The feeling in this was so strong. It desceibed someone I know. You did a good job explaining every detail in this poem. Good job! 5/5

.:CiNdY:.

I really like this like a lot. It's amazing you should comment and vote on my poems

This poem is one that many can relate to. The story was told with an amazing flaw. The choosing of words and metaphores were really good. Also, the rhyming fit and matched every stanza. This is truely a nice piece that many can relate to 5/5

"She lives through all her cliche tragedies
With a smile burned onto her face" <-- my favourite words:)

written really beautifully. vocabulary, metaphors, it all here is not only like decoration, but makes the poem so complete... truly, i have no words. . it's wonderful.

This poem was very mysterious!!! I enjoyed it very much!!! Very goodly works!! ^_____^ 5/5

Hey, noticed a request for comments on this poem on one of the discussion boards and the title intrigued me so I thought I'd come check it out. The first two stanzas are my favourite, especially the image of the rose. Very effective. Nice one,

Em xXx

I am completely stunned. That was truely and amazing poem. I loved every sing little bit. They way you used the words just blew me away. One little mistake though:

Not of word of it she speaks
^^It should be "Not a words of it she speaks".

[Added to my favorite poems] :]]

Keep writing!
Cayce

It speaks of me. thanks for your poem!

"Burdened with deceitfulness
Her jaded oppression remains concealed
Not of word of it she speaks
For fear of what she may reveal"

this is my fave line. 5/5 to you!

I truly love this poem... It is great

Such strong words. 5/5