I like this one alot keep doing a great job

Very complex piece, filled with excellently expressed emotions. You did picked clishe topic yet you wrote this poem with brilliant creativity and originality. I like your choice of words in every stanza. The flow of the whole poem is also flawless.
Greatly written, very deep piece.

5/5 from me

Wow...so sad and full of emotion. really really great poem, youre a terrific writer

This poem was rather good, but the last stanza kind of confused me. There's something wrong with it. To me, it didn't make sense. Other than that, the rest of the poem was just wonderful. Good job! 5/5

.:CiNdY:.

I see how you try hard, i enjoy reading , i wish you luck in the next one

I loved your choice of words in this piece! You took something evetybody always writes about and you made it your own with your wide variety of vocab used. The emotions behind this were dark and ones I am sure many could relate with which made it that much more interesting to read. The flow was flawless and nothing seemed forced. I could really tell this came straight from your heart which made it more real for me. Well done *5/5*

See i loved the pieace it was simply great from the flow to the creativity nice work my fav stanza is "The roses she had once admired
The beauty of its crimson red
Has been stained into a pitch black color
From the thoughts that linger through her head"

stained by memerios simply great-
raindrops 5/5

Absalutly beatuiful poem i loved it

Sounds like a drama queen in high-school haha. Well, the first thing I noticed was the AMAZING flow... each line flowed beautifully into the next. Then the concept, it was deep and well-thought-out. And at last, the way it was written. It was beautiful, the length was perfect, and the structure made it easier to read. Great write! 5/5

All i could ever say is WOW

All i could ever say is WOW

All i could ever say is WOW

(sorry.. let me just continue).. this one is a beautiful poem which i'm sure a lot of people can relate themselves into because i'm sure each of us sometimes try so hard just to fit in our society. great work!! (again sorry i accidentally posted a lot)

"She lives through all her cliche tragedies
With a smile burned onto her face
And all she ever wanted was to just fit in
To know that in this world, she had a place "

^^ This is true for almost all of the world, we just want a place to fit in and know that we have a purpose.The first two lines were magnificent, and the last two lines were pure truth.

"The roses she had once admired
The beauty of its crimson red
Has been stained into a pitch black color
From the thoughts that linger through her head "

^^ This is one of my favorite stanzas, the first two lines i read i wasnt sure where you were going with it, and then i read the last two lines, and it fit perfectly, i loved it.

"Burdened with deceitfulness
Her jaded oppression remains concealed
Not a word of it she speaks
For fear of what she may reveal "

^^ for me i didnt really like the first two lines, decietfulness just doesnt sound like a great word for that part. The last two lines were good, i felt like it was the climax of the poem(i.e, wat she may reveal)

"Impossibilities have overwhelmed her heart and soul
And she's been overcome by these surreal complexities
Through all of this affliction she endures
She still cloaks the pain from all her cliche tragedies "

^^ This is a great ending to this poem. Loved it, no critism for this last part.

Over it was a great read. Vocabulary was good and the rhyming again was also good, it never seemed forced. The flow was off in a spot or two, but it affected the poem in a good way. I think this definetly(sp) deserved a 5/5