by erin girl Feb 11, 2008
category :
Miscellaneous /
Misc. poems
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The magical world of spinning imagination has left me speechless. |
by Mr. Darcy
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Hiya, |
by Letty
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This was a very, very creative poem. I loved the imagery and the flow of it also. There is only one problem with it, you contradicted yourself in it. in the third line you say "In the circular rotation I don't notice a single thing around me"; but yet you go on to explain your surroundings in the following lines. I think that you should change the third line to: |