Wow. Loved it! I sort of feel the same way. Wanting to move on from the past, but clinging to it because it's all you know. I thought it was very well written too. Loved the rhyming and flow! You did a great job!

Cayce xx

Wow.. it was so dark, but I totally loved it! The choice of words.. wow.. it was beautiful! This is an amazing piece that totally captured my heart! You did a great job, darling =) Keep up the awesome work! 5/5 <3 <3 <3

~Kayla~

That was really good. I always tink about old times in my life too, and have written a few poems about it. I loved the flow in this as well. good job 5/5

Nice job! I really enjoyed reading this piece. I can completely relate to it, as can others ^^^ and that is the key to a great poem. When a writer can successfully portray their message across to their audience then they are a success.

The one little part that distracted me was:

"I'm forgetting my past and I have no future
I'm lost within myself- my inner"

As 'future' & 'inner' don't exactly rhyme perfectly and it was a tad off putting. Apart from that I loved it all!

Ally. x

I loved the way how you expressed mixed emotions of loneliness and anger...readers will definitely can relate as the words you used are easy to comprehend..

i liked the lazt stanza even if one line didnt rhyme...it touched me like "im forgetting my past and i have no future"...dont lose faith..everythin happens for areason and always find away to move forward...goodluck...5/5

It was a kind of dark, yet kind way to remember the past. nice job the flow was well and the 2nd paragraph was my favorite!!
5/5 !props!

An excellent poem. the flow was flawless and your message really gets across to the reader.
"Bye my past that haunts me today
Bye my lost ones that turned my sky gray
Bye to the frowns that lingered on my face
Bye to my empty heart full of space"
my favorite stanza.
-and i also like the last two lines of the second stanza and the very last line of the poem. :] a very enjoyable read. 5/5.

Wow, this poem was absolutely amazing. The flow was great and the feeling was just perfect. I love the way you wrote this poem. Great job! 5/5

.:CiNdY:.

Great poem!! 5/5