Transformation

Trully a sad verse you penned here. "anguish, sorrow kept serene"......love this line. When numbness takes its toll, to let pain drift, or rather keeping it at peace seems a better choice! And am sure when thats done, devotion thats held inward, has to change! Wonderful write.

This is fabulous from start to finish! Everything about this piece: description, imagery, vocabulary, rhymes, cadence, .... I thoroughly enjoyed it all. (: This piece is incredibly expressive, and thought provoking. Truly unique, as well. I have yet to read a poem like this (: Overall a wonderful job, one of my favorites today!

Keep writing down the bones!
Take Care `Novalyn

Oh Greenie,

This is truly a sad yet healing write you have penned. It draws the reader in and allows them to feel loss and emptiness in their own hearts.

I was once told to fake it until I make it. I wonder if that holds true for love and happiness as well?

Best of luck, babe. I hope all turns around for you.

~~Sher

Great short poem. =) 5/5

This is breathtaking from the beginning to the end. I like everything about this piece- your descriptions are amazing and you created fantastic, vivid imagery, your choice of words is superb and the rhymes and flow are flawless. Whole poem contains excellently expressed emotions that touched me deeply. Very original poem, too, different from anything I've read before.
Keep up!