Dancing Alone

by A Phoenyx in Flight   Feb 11, 2008


I was at the dance
and you were not there.
Tears running down my face.
I wish you were here.

We broke up.
And I so dearly
want you back.
And that night was no different.

I heard the song I dedicated to you.
The one called Here With Out You.
I could not hold back any longer.
And the tears ran freely down my face.

I thought for a minute I saw you.
Standing there alone.
But I knew better.
You live in another state.

I know that it was just me wishing.
That we could dance together.
And forget all our problems.
But I ended up dancing alone.

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  • 16 years ago

    by waking up inside

    Awwww

  • 16 years ago

    by SiLeNtLy ScReAmInG

    I think you did a good job saying what you wanted to say. Now maybe you could pick a style and use that to make your message more powerful. You have all your thoughts laid out here, and it's very easy to follow, but if you added a rhyme to it (I'm a sucker for a good rhyme) or maybe a pattern of length to the lines it could touch it up a bit. I'm gonna give you a 3/5 not to be mean, but because I think this has potential to be a good poem.

  • 16 years ago

    by Alex

    I like it.