The dance

And you call yourself a little bit insane, but these are thos most sane thoughts of seen. you wrote a wonderful love poem and i always wanted to do one on dances never the coruage though to post one. yuo did a wonderful job here better then some of ones i have seen.
-Raindrops 5/5

This poem was absoultely wonderful!
very very beautiful.
very pure. and very true.
what a wonderful piece, keep up the nice work!

Haha i love this it totally captures middle school dances! and the feeling when they go well . . . i think sometimes happiness is harder to capture than unhappiness. nice one =)

This poem was a great read. The only thing was parts of it felt really forced. Chose words and phrases that come from your heart. But the sound of the poem is beautiful and you did an excellent job expressing young love and joy.You chose a great and unique topic and expressed it beautifuly! keep it up! [= 5/5

This was a good poem, but based on the other two poems of yours that I have read, it is not your best. I feel as though it is missing something. Yes, it is a love poem, and it is supposed to be high and up-lifting, but when you write love poems and your stronger points are with other types of poems, you need to make sure that your poem has a certain flair that will attract people to it. I struggle with writing love poems and it can be difficult to write without sounding too cheesy.

Otherwise, it was a good poem. 4/5