The poem reminds me of a song. I thought the idea was good, but the flow was off. Some of the rhymes didn't work that well. Try using some more descriptive words. I liked your use of metaphores though.

Cayce xx

I love this one
like the way you put it together, starting every part with 'i am... ' simple structure but it works! &methaphors you us are unique
5/5

This is a very unique poem, the flow is a lil' off but some of my poems are like that lol. like it though 4\5 nice job!

Wow, beautiful poem. i can really relate. and it flow great! 5/5
xoxo
~waiting~

Very good poem!! 5/5