Starless Song

by SH3S fiNAllY H3R3 l0V3 U N3NA   Feb 12, 2008


The song I hear in my head,
Signifies my true feelings.
The rhythm is so strong,
It's like it knows how I feel.
The song describe the emptiness
That's deep inside of me.
The melody is so beautiful,
It matches my mood.
This song is inside my head,
Whenever I feel depressed.
But then I start to realize,
It's not even a song.
It's just the emptiness,
That I have in my heart.

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  • 16 years ago

    by EssenceOfLace

    I was not expecting the ending! I was expecting it to be like, saying you couldnt figure out what the song was.
    but saying it was the emptiness in your heart, was BRILLIANT!

    5/5 FANTASTIC write!

  • 16 years ago

    by Dark Demise

    Interesting, I've wanted to write a poem kind of about this same topic, but never could think of words to write down to explain it,

    I think it could use some better flow to it, but i'll give you lots of props for actually pulling off writing a poem about this.

    You ever try to play a insturment and write down how the song is going on in your head? but you can't get it right!, bugs me the most when i play guitar...

    Anyways keep writing!

  • 16 years ago

    by Shinobi

    This poem's structure is out of order, the flow breakes in some points and the rhymes aren't aligned. But it's idea is what's making it a good poem. When you're sad you sometimes here a song and suddenly symphetize with it, it sounds exactly as the thing describing your life. Although you think it 's the song, it's actually the emptiness inside you singing it's deadly melody. Nice concept, just because of that 5/5

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