Hey nice poem here. I like it and everything, but maybe don't try to focus on rhyming I too used to go to rhyming dictionarys and focus if words weren't exactly matched up right then I'd thrown in a word I didn't want to use. And I think that's what your doing so just focus on the emotion and then if you still don't like it then change it.
5/5
kaila

I liked the rhyme, as for the ending, maybe using the first stanza but changing it to the past tense. Or even just

"She looked at the world through watered eyes,
And this is what led to her final goodbye."

Something to bring the title into it so that you wouldn't need to change that too. I really enjoyed this though, especially the part about making promises to herself.

Em xXx

A very beautiful write. It was simply amazing. The beginning really drew me in and I just couldn't stop reading! The flow was flawless! And I really liked the repitition of the first two lines and the last two lines. It really works. And this piece just blew my mind away! lol definitely 5/5.!

This poem was beautiful and deep.
Its so meaningful and amazing, I loved the flow and the perspective. I loved it altogether.
<3Raych

thanks for commenting on my poem.