I really liked this poem, and i can't believe that im the first to comment on it! It is great, the flow was a little off at times, but the other parts of the poem fully made up for that! You did a great job on this! Keep up the great work! :]

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Wow. This was beautifully written. The emotions were intense and truly heartbreaking to read. The flow was flawless, and your word choice was fantastic. Amazing job. Overall: 5.5

- Steph.

Wow, this is excelent! great job, i love the structure of this one! really great job! i love the topic of this one, very unique and original, never read anything like it before! but amazing job! Keep it up!

I really love it so much emotion i love the repetitions in this one, This was a very heartbreaking read , i can tlel this came striahgt from the heart Great Job 5/5

I really love it so much emotion i love the repetitions in this one, This was a very heartbreaking read , i can tlel this came striahgt from the heart Great Job 5/5

This is a good poem. i like the concept of you using "dont tell me" .....it really makes the poem spark.

i can imagine someone screaming these words as they cry. good job.5/5

That's pretty much how I wrote it =)

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