I thought it was that unique. There are poems all on here about suicide and cutting. I've even written them. I think if you're going to write about that you have to make it really different, so your poem will stand out more.

Okay here is some constructive criticism.

Cuts on my wrists cant take any more
^^There should be a comma between wrists and can't <--- cant needs to be can't.

Too much pain too many tears
^^A comma needs to be placed between pain and too.

I'm screaming for help but your not listening
^^There needs to be a comma before but, and your should be you're.

I'm starting to feel so shut out
^^I think you could have use a better word than so. Try using more descriptive words.

I cant live with you but cant live without
^^That was an awkward line. Don't focus so much on the rhymes; focus more on the emotion and what you REALLY want to say. Also, cant needs to be can't.

Everything is just so surreal
^^Again, use a better word than so. I think I would even like "too" better. Try it out.

Livings driving me insane
^^Livings should be living's.

Hope this helped!

Keep writing!
Cayce

Thanks!
Ill make the changes and think of a new line for "I cant live with you...."

All comments are good. I dont mind the critisms. Thanks

You write really well and your so young too. really creative rhyming

Wow it was great. keep up the writing

That was so amazing...keep up the great work. this poem was so excellent

5/5

For me , i say , pay no attention to the critics for this poem , i can feel the pain , and the hurt,. and you writen it , with all heart and feelings , and i can reach those feelings,
in your words,

I know how you feel.
Good visual.
5/5

Woah!!! this poem is quite confronting but it is very very strong and full of feeling.
Very well done!!!

=( That's sad,
but really well written
I love it, it's great
5/5