The ocean of memories

by Kaila   Feb 15, 2008


Water splashing along the tide on the sandy beach,
Laughing burning our feet in the golden sand,
Rosy cheeks form dimples as you smile my direction,
Wisping my palm along the delicate edge of the ocean.

Brushing the tips of our noses in a sensual motion,
Entwining fingertips to form as a one,
Lying down thinking about the reality of it all,
Closing eyes to avoid the suns fiery gaze.

The sun is setting into the other side of the earth,
And we are just getting started in this world,
Laying head nuzzled against your chest,
Brushing my hair with your gentle fingertips.

Kissing every inch of warm sun kissed face,
Staring deep into the eyes of a summer love,
Sighing wishing we could pause this moment,
Hating the walk back to the lonesome house.

Awaiting at the door our eyes become one,
The world is spinning in this thunderous kiss,
Parting I want to cry another ocean,
So we could relive this moment again.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Darien

    "Water splashing along the tide on the sandy beach,"

    ^^
    'the tide on the sandy' Firstly, I'm not sure how water splashes along a tide, if a tide is what the water is. Secondly, that phrase did not flow very well.

    "Laughing burning our feet in the golden sand,"

    ^^ Not quite sure how laugter burns one's feet.

    The rest of the poem was fine. I just didn't like your opening sentences. It really made a bad impression for me.

    However, the other verses slightly made up for it. There was a romantic essence in this poem, it drifted in and out. There were a lot of lines I liked, and a few I didn't like. It was a good poem overall.

  • 16 years ago

    by Anthony Duvalle

    This was really quite nice

    i kood feel how the characters felt just by reading the words

    and your use of an ocean and beach really makes it that much better

  • 16 years ago

    by Unamed

    Omg!!!!!..this was really good!!!....i love it!!!!

  • 16 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    Very beautifully written. Very well thought out. The emotions here were obvious and clear and outstanding done. The flow was flawless and this was a very enjoyable read. :] defintiely 5/5.

  • 16 years ago

    by Darien

    Beautiful poem you created here. The title was well suited with the contents of the poem. I really like the setting and mood you started the poem with. It was very romantic and very calm. Good job on this one!

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