Children Eaters.

NightmareChild is amazing. I just did a collab with her =)
This is a dark poem, but it amused me.

"Eyes are flicking around the still room.
I'm like an animal hunting for it's prey
Searching for the children with fright
The children who have been led astray"

[^^Fantastic first stanza. It is very creepy, and draws you in, in a sick twisted way]

"I call out, "Here Kiddie Kiddie kiddies."
My sweet voice is hypnotizing them
One by one the scared children arrive
They have been declared condemned"

[^^Not your typical wors to rhyme. Which is good. I can hear the voice in my ear, and it is hypnotizing.]

"My heart is throbbing faster and faster
Can't wait to taste their delectable fear
"My sweet children, come forth to me"
Is the last and only sound they'll hear "

[^^this was probably the most demented stanza. Especially the last two lines of it. It shows that the "murderer" is a real psychopath. Lol not saying you are though XD]

"She looks so scared, so small, so tiny
Oh! but the fear! It tastes so luscious!
I'm draining her dry; she's fading away
But my mind says she's so scrumptious"

[^^I didn't really like how you went from talking about multiple victims, to a specific one. I think if the "she's" were "they" it would sound better. Because in the beginning you were talking about more than one child, and it sounds a lot creepier when you talk about more than one. Just a suggestion]

"We're monsters, creatures of the dark
We don't hide but embrace ourselves,
We don't care what other people think
They are twisted freaks, themselves"

[I can see a visual of vampires with this stanza. This last stanza sounds like it could be song lyrics. Something by Marilyn Manson lol.]

Overall, I enjoyed this poem a lot. It's a lot different than most of the poetry out there, at least different than what I am used to reading. The rhymes aren't perfect, but I like it that way. They seem less forced.

5/5
~Lace

This was a good poem but really not alot of details to draw from I like the way you wrote it but it seemed to be missing something well I really liked your work and hope to read more of it soon Robert

I loved it! I like the ending the most, the last stanza was very powerful. It flowed really well too. 5/5

Slightly twisted... But nicely written. Not to mention I read this after NightmareChild's poem for Adam, and Adam's poems for you, and NightmareChild. Haha, almost feel like I was there for this conversation :P

Good write! 5/5

We're monsters, creatures of the dark
We don't hide but embrace ourselves,
We don't care what other people think
They are twisted freaks, themselves

i love the ending it ties together the whole poem . The poem is very captivating and super twisted but amazing 5/5