Its not that twisted....it was a good ass poem though. Its game me a sence of dying little children....witch is awesome ^^

WHAT an amazingly freakish poem, loved it! My favourite line has to be:

"Can't wait to taste their delectable fear"

Delectable is such a great word haha. And an awesome end too, turning on the reader. Very creepy, 5/5 for sure.

Em xXx

Wow..this is a good..scary...and twisted poem... i like it though... what the heck was going through your mind.lol...

flowed good and everything.5/5 from me.

Hah it was really cool. I liked it. it wasn't like grusome or anything i mean you weren't saying how there blood tasted inside your mouth or anything cruel like that. It was just an overveiw which for me works. lol this poem needs to be a part in a horror movie lol
5/5
kaila

It wasn't that scary at all. i've seen worse at school. >.>

Hehe I like it actually. It kind of reminds me of one of those old school horror movies, wich by the way are the best horror movies. One correction would be the second stanza. The rhyme didn't work for me. but oh well. well done!

Whoa... weird..and twisted. i liked it. 5/5

I LOVED this. I love twisted things, and I am just fascinated by this. **eyebrows get closer together.*

We're monsters, creatures of the dark
We don't hide but embrace ourselves,
We don't care what other people think
They are twisted freaks, themselves

i love the ending it ties together the whole poem . The poem is very captivating and super twisted but amazing 5/5

Slightly twisted... But nicely written. Not to mention I read this after NightmareChild's poem for Adam, and Adam's poems for you, and NightmareChild. Haha, almost feel like I was there for this conversation :P

Good write! 5/5

I loved it! I like the ending the most, the last stanza was very powerful. It flowed really well too. 5/5

This was a good poem but really not alot of details to draw from I like the way you wrote it but it seemed to be missing something well I really liked your work and hope to read more of it soon Robert

NightmareChild is amazing. I just did a collab with her =)
This is a dark poem, but it amused me.

"Eyes are flicking around the still room.
I'm like an animal hunting for it's prey
Searching for the children with fright
The children who have been led astray"

[^^Fantastic first stanza. It is very creepy, and draws you in, in a sick twisted way]

"I call out, "Here Kiddie Kiddie kiddies."
My sweet voice is hypnotizing them
One by one the scared children arrive
They have been declared condemned"

[^^Not your typical wors to rhyme. Which is good. I can hear the voice in my ear, and it is hypnotizing.]

"My heart is throbbing faster and faster
Can't wait to taste their delectable fear
"My sweet children, come forth to me"
Is the last and only sound they'll hear "

[^^this was probably the most demented stanza. Especially the last two lines of it. It shows that the "murderer" is a real psychopath. Lol not saying you are though XD]

"She looks so scared, so small, so tiny
Oh! but the fear! It tastes so luscious!
I'm draining her dry; she's fading away
But my mind says she's so scrumptious"

[^^I didn't really like how you went from talking about multiple victims, to a specific one. I think if the "she's" were "they" it would sound better. Because in the beginning you were talking about more than one child, and it sounds a lot creepier when you talk about more than one. Just a suggestion]

"We're monsters, creatures of the dark
We don't hide but embrace ourselves,
We don't care what other people think
They are twisted freaks, themselves"

[I can see a visual of vampires with this stanza. This last stanza sounds like it could be song lyrics. Something by Marilyn Manson lol.]

Overall, I enjoyed this poem a lot. It's a lot different than most of the poetry out there, at least different than what I am used to reading. The rhymes aren't perfect, but I like it that way. They seem less forced.

5/5
~Lace