That Time Of Year

Oh Pete,

Such beautiful word are poetically penned with loving grace. You have written a wonderful and loving poem that anyone would be honor to read. I love the flow and the staza's.

Every letter is perfectly inked. It is wonderful to read such talented writing.

~~Sher

There's an itching, aching down in my soul
stopping my heart from ever being whole
`"Itching" -- a definite different chioce of word that's typically used. I like it .

an un-avowed desire that begs to be told
is a secret that I can no longer withhold.
`Hm, sometimes when I read it, "withhold" sounds too long, and yet when I re-read it, sometimes it doesn't, so I don't know what to think. But I adore adore that first line. "Un-avowed desire" -- gorgeous.

Something I want, no, something I need
more than the leaves on all of the trees
more than the sum of every mans greed
more than anyone would ever believe
`I like the first line -- the second? Not so much -- I feel like it could've been worded better. Third line? Just adoring. Last line? It felt too unoriginal and overused -- I've seen it used so often, it just smashed it for me.

more than the moon and stars combined
more than the sun could ever shine
more than these simple words can define
I want and need to be your Valentine.
`Awkward ending -- not the words, just the flow and syllabication. It's a sweet message being passed, but I just feel like the stanza was a tad weak -- along with the rhymes. "more than the sun could ever shine" sounds like a clumsy choice for me. But that's just me .

Four out of Five .
--..MiNDYY

Yet another great poem. This one is short and sweet but at the same time extremely descriptive. I love your use of imageryand I am yet again amazed by your ability to rhyme. :)

"more than the sum of every mans greed"

That line is just... beautiful. What a way to describe love!!!! You cannot possibly be single!! haha!!

Natalie

Sorry, didn't mention 5/5

Well, ain't you just the cutie! If I wern't married I give it a go! You get the mood right, the words perfect (and you drink like a fish!!!) Ha Ha.