Okay 1st off the poem had nostructure really at all. Some advice: make sure in each line there is sort of the same syllabol count. 2nd. it didn't have to much emotion really try to work on that
overall it was an okay poem

Kaila, this is art. There is no right or wrong way to write a poem. How can it possibly show emotion if you agonize about rhyming ever other line? This poem is beautiful, and it comes straight from the heart.