All I Ask

by HidinVictim   Feb 18, 2008


I'm giving you my heart,
And its almost free,
Hope you know the feelings
That swirl inside of me.
I've been hurt to many times,
lied to and,
punished for my crimes
With you I feel fine
Wish I had that feeling
All the time
All I ask is this...
Please don't lie
And if this is to much,
Than thank you for your time.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Short, yet simple and something i can relate to. The emotion was strong yet not sloppy or too powerful. i liked this one lots
    Tara-kay

  • 16 years ago

    by Cassie Cain

    Great poem keep up the good work. take care.

  • 16 years ago

    by xXxMzPuRpLe BaBiiExXx

    The last part....!!!

    "All I ask is this...
    Please don't lie
    And if this is to much,
    Than thank you for your time. "

    sounds like something i would say!!!
    love it!!

  • 16 years ago

    by she

    Felt like this many times before,i really like the words you used, and how you've been hurt to many times,and ask if this is just to much,i believe soo many have felt this as well,good job

  • 16 years ago

    by Not

    THIS POEM IS SO SIMPLE BUT YOU GET YOUR POINT ACROSS, IT WOULD EVEN BE BETTER IF PUT INTO STANZA..4/5 KEEP WRITING!!...=]

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