Short, but well written nevertheless! 5 from me, keep it up!
P.S. Capitalizing your 'i's may help. I know it's an awfully anal retentive thing for me to make comments about, but little things do matter in poetry, I suppose. So yes, very minor thing, but I thought I'd be a bit of an ass and point it out anyway.

Breath-taking. I love the pain expressed in this poem. deep

5/5

You have the ability to make pain sound beautiful...I loved this poem. It was a little short but that was okay because the content made up for it! The words were great and the flow was brilliant. 5/5

I love it.

Ally. x

Wow this is an amazing poem short but to the point...love ur artistic style of writing...incrediable...5/5

I love this poem it really speaks to me i can really relate to this very welled

Really liked this poem
I'm overwhelmed by the pain,
although it never shows
--sometimes it's good for others to know you're hurting hun

Absolutely fantastic, and the title simply goes well with the poem, I felt an immediate source of imagery while reading it too which allowed me to connect very well with it. Great job!

Really amazing poem, reminds me alot of my poems and i liked your writing style 5/5 from me

As the light fades to black,
I allow my eyes to close.
I'm overwhelmed by the pain,
although it never shows.
--this makes me think of a girl who always appears to be happy but really has so much going on but no one stops to ask

I'm being carried away,
so far away from here.
effortlessly drifting,
I'm leaving behind the fear.
--it makes it seem like she is now trying to be strong and let everything that is going wrong just drift away

leaving behind the heartache,
forgetting the chaos and despair.
I wonder if anyone will miss me,
or if anyone would even care.
--aw...this is a really sad verse but true b/c a lot of people feel this way

with these thoughts I vanish,
just another poor lost soul.
roaming the world forever,
doomed to never again be whole.
--this helps give imagery and is a good ending to the poem solid and yet deep

great job! 5/5 <33