Dayenu

Thanks for your suggestions, I've omitted the P.S and hopefully this flows much smoother.

Huh.... Good work :)

Really sweet and the form of a letter to a reader is a nice idea, makes the poem very personal
nice use of repetitions, it really does work here
and the idea about precious things like love, friendship etc
and btw gradation (beauty-voices of my loved ones-memories-people-a reason to live) here works perfectly, it keeped me interested to read the end of the poem
5/5

I love the basic idea, and how it was written...in my opinion very original!

I really love this poem although the PS kind of broke up the flow a little. It's really nice and different to what I normally get to read. My favourite lines:

"It would have been enough if I was given life
but I received something more, a reason to live"

Magic.

Em xXx