Surrender

Wonderful.
maybe try to use some fancier diction.
it could make it better, however it is already wonderful

Hmm. The ending was good, but the beginning was really strong and the first four lines were my favorite. :] This piece was very well flowing and it's short but has a lot of meaning. 5/5.

I like the length. It makes it more powerful and emphatic; tends to make all the words and ideas stick in my head. I really liked the last two lines a lot. Well done. 5/5.

This is a great poem... you stuck to the topic and didnt go off track like some people tend to do... in my own personal opinion i think if you made it longer it would definately be more powerful... its great the way it is though.

5/5 from me.

Excellent. I really liked the repitition of the word Surrender I thought it really made an impact on the poem. This was a short poem but it had an excellent start and a perfect finish. 5/5