Hmm. The the beginning stanza really captured my attention and lured me in to read more. As the poem progressed though .. the flow and ideas became scattered and I became sorta lost. I liked the pace thought because it was fast paced yet meaningful. The last stanza didnt fit the poem for me ... it seemed out of place but overall the meaning and imagery behind the poem were great. Well done.

I liked the poem.
was a bit chop and change.
but i still got the gist of it.
keep writing.
well done.

xx

I really loved the title. :]

Honestly, my first impression of this was "Ugh! Not another love poem!". I really don't enjoy reading love poems, because they're usually pretty much all alike in some way or another, but I really loved the opening lines. They really drew me in. "Shattered and scattered" <-- Those lines. I just love how they sound together when you read them. What I would change about the first line is take out the word "And". It's just not very appealing.

Beat, drop, beat.
Drop, beat, drop.
Stop and repeat.

^^ Really loved those lines. It was as if I could really hear the rain beating down on the rooftops. They, also, intrigued me, and made me want to continue reading this poem.

Whispered sweet nothings,

^^ Eeek. Big cliche. >.< But for some reason it seems to work, so I wouldn't change it.

I'm not entirely sure what it was, but some stanza's were definitely harder to read than others. I think it was just I'm so use to reading four lines in a stanza that when there was only three it threw me off.

Overall, it was a pretty good poem, considering I hate love poems. :]

Great job!

Keep writing!
Cayce