Benny's Love TO Michelle

Very beautiful
but why don't you organise it in stanzas? i think it will look more eye-catching that way
this poem, as all your poems i've read, is so warm-hearted!! you have an amazing ability to express so much, so many emotions through simple words without looking banal.

You of course spilt your heart out like no other in this poem. Um, a pretty good poem overall. Another sweet, adorable poem expressing feelings for someone you love deeply. However! .. I don't like the whole paragraph thing. Not my kinda style. and I really think you should put it in stanza format. Readers will appreciate it. It's easier onthe eyes. =) 4/5.

This is really beautiful. The only thing that bothers me about it is that it's all bunched up into one paragraph. If you have it spread out more, and put into stanzas, it'll look so much better:

You put Love in loveliness
and the sweet in sweetness, too.
I think they took life's dearest things
and wrapped them up in you.

And when I send good wishes,
they're filled with Love so True,
And I hope the year will bring you
Joy that is your due.

For when I think of you Michelle,
I can't forget the thought of how
much I think of you so many times
and wish with all my Heart.
That I could reach across the miles
that keep us far apart,

And somehow Just communicate the
things I'd like to say,
If I were standing close to you
instead of far away from YOU.

^^ I would suggest something like that. However, I don't like the ending. The rhyme scheme became messed up towards the end. However, it's a very beautiful poem.

Aw i love you sweetheart.. and i know we've argued alot and it seems like we'll never make it but i know we will. i love you. kiss kiss.