Thats good.
Keep it up. It seems like my stlye of writing.
To me it has a very musical/song feel to it though.

I really like the wording you have used in this piece

The first two paragraphs are absolute master pieces, each with a very nice ryhme, and ryhme scheme. they also have a very strong ending sentence, witch is really cool. but in the second paragraph id shorten this sentence:

with each move my body makes, the pain is still the same

To:

With every move, my pain remains the same

I know you may have worked hard on the last half of this poem, but i would do away with it (not saying its bad) and write another 6 line piece and add it in some where, that way the whole poem will all be in the same ryhme scheme. just a suggestion. but like i said those top two paragraphs are exceptional. thx for the good read.