Awesome poem, flowed really well and made an amazing image in my mind, almost like he treats you as a rag doll? |
This is truly powerful from the first to the last line. Whole poem is greatly written, very effective and with excellently expressed emotions. Original, enjoyable write. I can relate to this in a way which makes it even more powerful for me. You created good flow in every stanza. |
by Sweet lig
Hmm what a great choice! the titled was very interesting and specially the message seems very dedicated and great express those nice thoughts.. keep it up and keep on writing all what u feel.. great job 5/5 |
Another deep poem, you're good at tapping into emotions. This was good :P But I have one little thing I thought might help *my personal opinion so don't get upset* |
by Sourav
This is good. I'm really impressed. Well done! |
by A l y s s a
Very impressive. My favourite stanza |
by Meme
I love this poem so much |
by El
Another great poem and again with great flow. Iy was beatiful and you used the words well. |
I really love the flow to this, it flowed soo beautifully! The word choice was really good, and the concept was brilliant as well! Very nice job on this! 5/5 |
by JustKristina
Love this poem! its great, wonderful flow and word choice. But i don't like the last line in this "Your choice" i think that it took away from the structure of the poem. The last stanza is powerful enough. i'd say just leave it at that. but again, great work! keep it up! :] |
by Jahieda
I loved your poem!!!!! |
by Jenni
Wow. This was AWESOME! This poem was filled with so much malice and hatred toward this person who is letting you believe that they love you!! WOW! I am just in awe here. Very beautifully written! 5/5 |
Reallllyyy goood. |
by SCARECROW
In the third stanza, perhaps you meant "seams" and not "seems"? |
by Blissful
Loved it! Short sweet and to the point yet filled with so much power and profound emotions. The flow was flawless and nothing seemed forced which made it more of a joy to read. |
by Lu
Tear me to pieces, |
While I can see that people can relate to this emotion of love that hurts or is not received, I think as a poem it could have been a lot better at expressing the pain instead of just feeling like words for a reader to look at. |
Wow, another amazing write! You have so much talent, as I have said many times before. |
by fearose
Again with the game. I love this. It's almost like part two to "Depression Game". I like that repeating theme. This one is just as well penned and so full of emotions. It's subtle and yet just right. When reading it, you get that feeling of slowly dying in a painful way. You expressed that well. 5/5 |