Left at your feet

by cowgirlstar26   Feb 21, 2008


Tonight I'll spend here,
writing out my heart
for no one I look to
will follow me as I embark

this opaque organ of mine
fills me with a listless sorrow
broken through years and miles
waiting for an answer, tomorrow?

this voice surrounds me
calling me toward the light
though I remain here, in between
waiting here, to be revived

my heart screams out
though restrained from breaking
I can't help but wonder....
all the mistakes...I'm still making

though miles separate,
my tears form and ocean,
nothing brings you back
still I'm left with a notion

yet I'm still here,
waiting and wondering...
what's next for my life?
I'm at your feet stuttering

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  • 16 years ago

    by Dark Savior

    My heart screams out
    though restrained from braking
    I can't help but wonder....
    all the mistakes...I'm still making

    - braking should be Breaking.

    though miles separate,
    tears form and ocean,

    -tear form an ocean,

    That is how it should read.

    I gave this poem a five because of the fact that it really is a good poem. You, and I have different tastes in writing. It is a refreshing breath to read this type from time to time.

  • 16 years ago

    by Robert

    The flow was good and the message was very clear all and all it was a good poem. The images could have been abit more understandable but for the most part it was a good read Plot121

  • 16 years ago

    by 4 track demo

    "opaque organ.. fills with listless sorrow"
    good god..BAM!..each line drew my in closer and closer, such a glorious write, i felt such yearning as i read it, and the subtle power of it was almost overwhelming...just awesome..

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    The title is amazing, it caught my attentions and pulled me straight in this remarkable piece. This poem is crowned with sweet simplicity that highlights equal amounts of fascinating beauty and overwhelming sadness within every stanza. Excellently written piece from the beginning to the end, so original and creative, filled with heartfelt emotions.
    I simply enjoyed in every line.
    Keep up!
    5/5 from me

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