The title is amazing, it caught my attentions and pulled me straight in this remarkable piece. This poem is crowned with sweet simplicity that highlights equal amounts of fascinating beauty and overwhelming sadness within every stanza. Excellently written piece from the beginning to the end, so original and creative, filled with heartfelt emotions.
I simply enjoyed in every line.
Keep up!
5/5 from me

"opaque organ.. fills with listless sorrow"
good god..BAM!..each line drew my in closer and closer, such a glorious write, i felt such yearning as i read it, and the subtle power of it was almost overwhelming...just awesome..

The flow was good and the message was very clear all and all it was a good poem. The images could have been abit more understandable but for the most part it was a good read Plot121

My heart screams out
though restrained from braking
I can't help but wonder....
all the mistakes...I'm still making

- braking should be Breaking.

though miles separate,
tears form and ocean,

-tear form an ocean,

That is how it should read.

I gave this poem a five because of the fact that it really is a good poem. You, and I have different tastes in writing. It is a refreshing breath to read this type from time to time.