This was great. It's good to strike out on your own, to find your place in the world, live your dreams, but it's also good to know you have a place to go back to, a home, where you know you are welcomed and loved. The flow was good, as were the rhymes. I really liked the metaphores. I think you did a great job! Awsome write!

Keep writing!
Cayce

Wow I can totally relate to this. I usually think of what I'm going through in a negative way but this poem kind of makes me think of it differently. Thank you. I especially love the last stanza. Rhyme (as usual!) was spot on and the flow was absolutely fabby. Another 5/5 from me,

Em xXx

Hi..well ur poems are really great...its nice to read them especially the rythm of it is nice...good job...hope to read more of Ur poem.....ur poems are really nice thats all that i could say...

bhern ^__^

Your lucky you didn't get lost!

Let me start with - this is a GREAT poem. You did a wonderful job and I see no grammar mistakes or anything through-out it. (:

It will mean so much to so many people, because it's so easy to relate to. . . and in a way that doesn't matter, because it's YOUR poem. But, I just find it refreshing to know I'm not the only one going through the things life disses out.

Well, even with the perfection through-out the poem. . . There's still one thing , I believe could be better and that's :

"But it's time to go home. "

Maybe try to make it " But it's time that I go home"

that, just sounds better to me. Now, it's your poem and it will NOT hurt my feelings the least bit if you don't agree, it's just a suggestion.

Keep up the great work, darling. (:

Wow, this is a great poem, i like the perfectly timed rhymes, well chosen words and at one time in life, almost everybody can relate to this.. I stay away from home 80% of my life.. Really love your work, keep it up

A brief and very effective poem with a pointed message with perfect rhyme and rhythm.