Lost

by XxToWriteLoveOnHerWristxX   Feb 21, 2008


I'm still here,
sad and alone,
wasting my time,
no one to hold.

You broke me,
deep down inside,
sometimes I wish,
that I would die.

With this pain,
in my heart,
I can't believe,
it's tearing apart.

We were close,
not close enough,
guess it's true,
I'm not loved.

I'm done trying,
done shedding tears,
it came true,
my biggest fear.

Leave me shattered,
I'm grabbing pieces,
putting them back,
my existence seizes.

It'll just break,
again and again,
not quite healed,
before we began.

So hurt me,
you're not forgiven,
don't ever forget,
what's believed in.

Your Heart..

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  • 16 years ago

    by StonedGooberz

    The 4th stanza really does not rhyme but it still has its flow...i like how your poems ore so short but yet so emotional. i use to be able to do that but to much stuff made me forget quite how. nice job
    -Raindrops 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by desiring love

    Wow I loved it. The emotion in it was great!

  • 16 years ago

    by claire

    I love the short lines - its concise, but expressive. i like how you said you're done shedding tears. this poem has a decisive edge- it has backbone.

  • 16 years ago

    by Anaisthitos

    This poem couldve been better but it was alright. The feeling of it was great and the words were great however the ending could use some work and the flow and rhyming did not stay constant throughout the poem. The idea of the poem was good and the rythm was good, definately worked though a little boring. overall, it wasn't great but it was simple and I liked it. if you worked with it you could probably make it a really good poem. keep writing! 4/5

  • 16 years ago

    by EssenceOfLace

    I really liked this. i have 2 suggestions

    "sometimes I wish,
    that I'd die"
    if you changed the "I'd" to "I would" it would make that stanza flow better.

    and, on the last stanza, the word "your" shoild be changed to "you're"
    thats all. lol
    it was a good poem. very deep and expressive.
    5/5

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