Hm. I can't decide how much I like this one. It has great potential, not just because it's easy to relate to, but because the title itself makes people ask questions. We all 'live our lives to death' but how can we not? And how fast are we going to find our deaths? Will it be the relief we hope for? Why do we think it's relief?... All kinda of questions like that can be taken straight out of this poem. I like that part of it.
However, I wish you put more of yourself into it. For example, I think one of your best stanzas is this one:

'Those words hit home for me,
"I hope you're as happy as you're pretending to be."

(given that the rhythm is a little off, but in all honesty, keeping rhythm steady doesn't quite shine through as your strong suite in this write) But that line in itself was written in your own blood. I loved that about it. I could kind of see the world through your eyes when you put something that personal in there. I think that's the mark of a writer when you can give your soul to the reader. That's why I was kind of hoping to see more of that from this write. Nonetheless though, it's still quite good.
I would re-work some of it, for rhythm purposes. Mind you, it's not the kind of poem you want to read and tap your foot to, but it should hold some kind of melodic or faster paced rhythm to represent 'living to death' and racing through life. Y'know? It's not super essential, but I think it would probably get you some bonus points to be consistant.
All in all, this is a well done poem. I hope to read and comment on atleast one more of your poems before my weekend is over.
Keep up the good stuff :).

Again, excellent job! I love reading your poems. (: Hmm. Is this based off of truth? Or just a poem you wrote? You did good though. Keep it up. I love reading your work! 5/5 always.

Well that was depressing...
but satisfying in a way...so good job on your part!

although on the second to last line it wasn't really flowy, but don't mind me I might have read it wrong lol

anyhoo, good job! ^_^

Oops, did I say second to last line? I'm sorry, I meant second to last STANZA.

Quote:

"Those words hit home for me
"I hope you're as happy as you're pretending"
It's like I seem to be afraid of the fact that life
Seem to be unending"

:)

I know exactly what you mean:
"I hope your as happy as you are pretending"
that hit home, I have been pretending latley to be happy when really, inside, everything is dying. Thats me, always hiding behind a perky smile, I'm sick of it, I SHOULDN"T GIVE UP!, you should know that too. And that poem, I dunno, it sparked something in me. You really inspired me, thanks for that. I've read alot of your poems, And I will read more, but right now, I need time to think. I guess, Wow If I'm boring you with my sentimental comment just tell me, I'll keep them to point from now on, unless you don't mind life stories, lol. Thanks for writing those, great job

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