by Jodie Phillips Feb 22, 2008
category :
Dark, fantasy /
unexplained
How can I live this way |
by Nobody
Omg this poem is amazingly good i loved it! you give each poem its own personalty and flare i love you ryhmes and word choice. the depth of pain and frustration is so real you express emotions beautifully! xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx so so so talented! 5/5 |
Very very good i loved it : ) i hate when people try to play mind games on you or get joy out of watching you in pain when all you want is a relationship with them....its heartbraking : / but you did a wonderful job on the poem! 5/5 <33 |
by Mike Wilburn
Using my weaknesses to burn my brain |
by kia
I really related to this one. Funny how mental abuse is so much harmful than physical abuse. It really well written poem all the same 5/5 |
I felt the rhymes were repetitive. For example, you used a lot of words that rhyme with, away, day, play. That sort of thing. It got annoying. I also felt the worlds could have been more advanced. For me I like to see complex or not used as frequently words. I don't even have to know what the words me. In fact it may be better that way because then I will be forced to expand my vocabulary. I just felt the poem was lack luster and the word and rhyming choice took away from the message of the poem. Interesting title though. 2 because I got lost and choice of words. |