Thz alot for ur comment

Thz alot

Good work... Nice poem... Noha, you are really nice poet... I love your work :)

Thz thats makes me try to do the best

Thz alot

It has potential to became brilliant! But at moment is just okay.
The flow was off throughout, although it did make sense.
Your slang through off the flow too, and maybe it would be better broken into stanza's.
But other than that, i liked it and you did a good job.
Tara-Kay

Probably this is a write with an inside meaning.. i was just distracted by how you wrote it.. it wouldn't hurt to write "you" as "you" and not just using the letter "u".. i noticed it even more because there were a lot of "u's"..try rearranging the sentences a bit so as not to use the word "you" too much.. and I also noticed that you capitalized some "u's".. it made me think that it was referred to God somehow.. well that's about it.. hope you don't take it personally.. using shortcuts might hinder your poem from really shining through.. and if you really want to use it, i suggest you classify your poem under slang.. hope this helps you somehow.. i really like the meaning of your poem though.. ^_^

~angel~

Thz alot angel i love ur comment it help me alot and i will try to do all what u say in my next, thz loveNpain,thz tara

Aww, this poem was adorable! And it was well-written... great write!

I loved the scene you set for your poem it vivid and great. i could almost see you sitting underneath a lamp desk writing it. your flow was a bit off but all in all your emotion was pwerful and that plus ur scenery made it a most enjoyable poem great work-
raindrops 5/5

This poem shows alot of emotion and I can really feel the love (sounds a bit cheesy). But I must say there is 2 faults which is the vocabulary and the text talk using 'u' instead of 'you'. But other than that it was great. 5/5

Hi this poems was goo but not one of my fave from your collection, the vocabulary could do with improving but the meaning of the words themselves are good. keep on writing god poetry hun x

4/5

I justt love this poemm noha great work!

GOOD POEM(BETTER TO UNDERSTAND IF PUT IN STANZAS)BUT BESIDES THAT ITS A SWEET POEM
5/5

This is a really pretty poem, I liked the way you put your words 5*5