Playful Games, Strong Heart (Collab With Zee)

by Jenni Marie   Feb 26, 2008


Come a little closer this way darling; can you see the hidden spite in my eyes?
Do you remember when I said we wouldn't always be playing on your damn terms,
Well the day's finally arrived; thoughtless lies have finally become a little tired,
How'd you ever fool me when everything you ever uttered was borderline cliche?

Can you feel this steamy whisper slowly approaching upon your deceiving face?
How dare you think of the nerve trying to play me with your worthless games?
Let me share this moment you will never forget with your breathing days left.
I am no longer the cluts on walking heels; stupidity of mine has flushed away.

It's been a long time coming; I'll be the first one to admit to that honey.
Only now I'm starting to wonder just why it's taken so long to figure you out,
Snuck under my guard; deceiving me with false hope of "Happily ever after."
But now the pretty haze has lifted; able to see you for the schmuck you truly are.

Days came, nights fell; wasted sayings murmured into your two pitiful ears,
Don't say a word; I will win with these damn powerful words that I speak.
You are dead petals falling from once a beautiful creation in my mind,
You must notice you're a fool trying to play a woman's heart so strong.

Look at that sweetheart; now your falsified beauty has started to wilt,
What's that on your face now; an expression of surprise and bewilderment? ,
That's right; I know about every little thing you ever said or did sweetheart,
Know it'll take a while for your concrete head to realize you've been caught out.

Poor darling you must know better; how very confused you have come to be,
These eyes were clearly only born to be used with power corrupting others.
Never have you thought this day would come, your untruthful face so stiff,
Times have past with agonizing thoughts still flowing along in my head.

Tangled stories you're spinning; tired of watching you trip yourself up,
Used to be entertaining; only now I've become more than a little bored,
Even now, you're using the same old lines on me every single day,
Still haven't had a clue I've known about your idiocy for quite some time.

Hysterically laughing at the sad sight of such a pathetic player,
Honestly did you really think you could have the strength to win me over,
I shall glance at you for the last time darling with my deceiving eyes.
Watch my back side slowly leave you left alone in this empty place.

So I guess what I'm saying is now I'm finally taking my leave of you,
Realizing I'm better than you; always have been ,and don't even have to try.
Look at that honey ain't it such a shock that I've become the strong one,
And all you'll ever be is just another tired cliche heartbreaker.

**Collab With Zeenat
http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/author.html?id=283279 **

*this was fun Zee =)

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  • 16 years ago

    by Italian Stallion

    Wow, what a write from the both of you. I loved it. The flow was good, but could use a little work here and there. Overall this was a good collab. Great Job you two!!! Your choice of words was excellent, and had great meaning.

    Now it's time to have some constructive critisism, Instead of constant praising.

    The structure needs a lot of work, it's as though I am reading a book, the whole poem is in paragrapghs, where I feel it would be a lot better in stanzas.

    For example lets take the first "paragrapgh"

    "Come a little closer this way darling; can you see the hidden spite in my eyes?
    Do you remember when I said we wouldn't always be playing on your damn terms,
    Well the day's finally arrived; thoughtless lies have finally become a little tired,
    How'd you ever fool me when everything you ever uttered was borderline cliche?"

    And make it into "Stanzas"

    Come a little closer this way darling;
    Can you see the hidden spite in my eyes?
    Do you remember when I said,
    "We wouldn't always be playing on your damn terms"

    Well the day's finally arrived;
    thoughtless lies have finally become a little tired,
    How'd you ever fool me
    When everything you ever uttered was borderline cliche?

    Also, since this is so so so long, I would make it into a series instead of one poem, that way it breaks it up a little bit, and doesn't get the read uninterested in the piece, I'm not saying this poem isn't interesting, I'm just merely saying, it can be so long that someone may not feel like reading on. Just a suggestion, which I felt would help a little.

    Overall a wonderful write from both of you. You both have a way with words and I love the way this turned out. Keep up the fantastic work!!!

    Peace, Joe

  • 16 years ago

    by Lemma

    I'll copy and paste the comment I left on Zee's

    Ooooo! Woopah! That is the sound of someone getting poetically rinsed! This was awesome, really powerful and full of anger and spite. I loved it! The first stanza is my favourite, plunges right into the heart of the poem and gets straight to the point. 5/5

    Em xXx

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