Very dark and creepy, the vocabulary was awesome. Excellent 5/5

It is always refreshing to read a poem written by a poet that has a command over vocabulary, that can be an extremely rare thing. Your descriptions and diction were well written. Your title actually ties really well into the poem and helps interpt its meaning which is really cool, because titles are often meaningless. A very intellectual write, and you are only 14? Wow. well done.

Wow. Very creative. It was very descriptive. I loved your word choice.
Although I would suggest adding punctuation
like "." and ","
I just think it would make the poem look better.
overall, 5/5

I just loved the language you used here. It was different, refreshing and got your message across flawlessly. The flow was just perfect and nothing seemed forced. The mood was haunting and the words you picked fit everything perfectly. Well done *5/5*

I loved this poem, such a contrast to the one I just read, great imagery and some really awesome vocab. One thing I thought you could change in the first line is "innocence" to "innocent". To me it would fit better with the next line. But anyway, it was still great and I'm still giving it 5/5 no questions asked =)

Em xXx

Hey the vocab here is really good, and
imaginary is great
i'm not that dark-poetry-lover and somewhy i couldn't imagine the whole picture u draw in this poem (maybe it's just me and my poor English;] )
but i'm impressed by your wording and i'm sure there is much more then words in your poem and i'll keep trying to get it lol
so, i put 5/5

Very good. Dark and mysterious. Your descriptions were wonderful, and it told a very scary story that happens to us all. Wonderfully written. 5/5