by Anonymous Angel Feb 27, 2008
category :
Friendship, family /
family
We once were a family, |
by NeverBelieve
I think your poem is good, well writen and i can relate to parts aswell, you have a talent well done hun keep it up Cx 5/5 |
by Grace
I lov this poem! i can see were your coming from! my dad thought that partying and getting messed was more important than being with his family! so he just left and i couldn't be happier at this point! |
You start off rhyming, but it trails off. I think it would have been better to force the rhymes than to just stop them completely. I don't know if you were rhyming on purpose or not in the first place, but it really threw me off. |
We once were a family, |
by Love vs Fate
Such a lovely poem about family and life. |