Good poem i dont really have any suggestions because i saw no flaws in it that i think need work so yea great job

I like it and it shows a lot of emotion.
it kept my attention very well.

My heart fell, bloody on the floor
In Unison With Thunders Loud Menacing Roar

^^ my fav line ^^

Well this poem definitely tugged at my heartstrings. It was really sad, and I truly felt sorry for the narrator. It painted a picture as if they had lost everything they had; left with nothing.

"In Unison With Thunders Loud Menacing Roar"
^^ There should be an apostrophe at 'thunders', since it's the roar belonging to the thunder.

"Dieing Slowly In This Wretched Storm,"
^^ It should be 'Dying', not 'Dieing'.

I also think it was unnecessary to capitalise the majority of your words, but that just might be me. :)

This is really really good because you express feelings with very short phrases

well done

Great piece.A lot of emotions in a few well written words.The imagery was amazing.It was heart-breakingly sad but it was still lovely.I really loved it, a 5/5 for sure.
Keep writing,
Rado

Thats a good one i like that.....