Unheard Screams

I love this poem, it's very deep.

I enjoyed this read very much

Very nice comment left from the reader. She has broke the poem down and given the meanig it brought to her.

This poem is very deep. I can relate to this and think you have wrote it well... i will give it a 5 because....

1. i think you picked a good strong title
" unheard screams " it stood out but at the same time didnt say what the poem would be about completely.

2. " Pain ripping every nerve
Willing your breath away
Opening your eyes again
Agony's here to stay"

^^ this stanza was amazing to open the poem because it represented the depressed mind, and a lot can relate to that therefor it makes you want to read on.

3. " Sleep the only comfort
Yet so hard to find "

^^^ I liked this line because i am in the cycle that never ends, sleep is an escape to living... but at the same time you can never sleep.... which feeds into the depression. and i think this is what you have expressed through out your whole poem.

4. I liked the flow of the poem and the ryhming, it made it very easy to read and understand. there was no analysing anything.

5. I think you reached out with your emotions to those who also feel the same. Its almost like you have wrote about a daily routine in the day of someone suffering depression. and i think you done a great job.

So, well done from me, I cant think of any suggestions for you.

xxx

That was seriously intense